Slice of Life Post by Barb Edler, May 16, 2023

Today’s the last day for my ekphrastic writing class. It has been so much fun, but too short. I love writing ekphrastic poetry and the class composed of three students and one writing guide has been energizing. During the course, I wrote four ekphrastic poems, and really only two are any good. I must admit that I write a lot of bad poetry so that I even wrote one that I’m happy with is an accomplishment. Later, I need to do the hard task of revising the ones that are particularly poor because they’re worth the effort.

As I feel the weight of another gloomy day, I need to remind myself that my life is heaven compared to The Migrant Mother. I wish I could share another writer’s work from the class because it was phenomenal in sharing factual information about this woman’s life. Did you know that Florence Owens never received a dime for Dorthea Lange’s iconic photo? Later in life, she was interviewed by another reporter who photographed Florence with the three daughters who are in the original photograph. In this interview she basically said that they did what they could to survive.

Inspired by Dorthea Lange’s Migrant Mother

she tastes gritty sand
blistering heat    pressed inside
her clothes    calloused hands

she breathes scorched desert
air      swallows      endless squalor
thirsts for cool water

she remembers bright
nights    dancing by the river
his hands     his promise

she longs to embrace
her hungry children     searching
for sustenance     love

her exhaustion      writhes
flickers like      wildfire 


Barb Edler
8 May 2023


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8 responses to “The Last Day”

  1. Glenda Funk Avatar

    Barb,
    I didn’t know you were taking an ekphrastic poetry class. I love your poem. The caesura in lines creates a trail. I remember reading Lang posed those photographs. Years ago I took a Steinbeck workshop through the Idaho Humanities Council and learned a lot about Lang. And I suspect you’re too hard on your poetry. Send them my way, so I can “judge” them. 😉

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    1. Barb Edler Avatar

      You’re way too busy to critique my poems right now, but I will share one in June. Thanks!

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  2. Maureen Young Ingram Avatar

    Barb, there is so much I love here! Truly, it is an exquisite poem. I love the spacing in the lines, and how they play with the meaning – emphasizing & intertwining ‘columns’ of words – “pressed inside” visually marries with “calloused hands,” and “writhes” with “wildfire.” That opening line – wow! “she tastes gritty sand” – what a life she lived. What a beautiful testament to ekphrastic poetry your poem is, showing how this form brings a story to life, transports the reader deep within the historical moment.

    I am so saddened (and sadly, not surprised) that she never received any money for the photo; heartbreaking how we simply do not care for those who need our care and outreach.

    I see a new art piece – the photo alongside your gorgeous words, framed and treasured.

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    1. Barb Edler Avatar

      Thanks, Maureen. That’s a great idea! I have written a poem that’s very personal based on a photograph so I plan to revise that one and use it as a Christmas gift.

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  3. Stacey Shubitz Avatar

    When they say a picture is worth a thousand words, you found a way to economize them to tell a story about that photograph. Your carefully chosen words were a precise and poignant description of that iconic photo.

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  4. kimhaynesjohnson Avatar

    Oh, Barb, this is quite moving – what a tearful journey for this woman of a bygone era. We definitely take things for granted today, and I am so guilty of it myself – convenience foods instead of appreciating the miracle of a fresh tomato and all the rain it took, and cars to save miles on feet and shoes. I think I miss out on so much of the blessing when the work was not there for me as it was for her. Your poem is precious. I like that you said “Later, I need to do the hard task of revising the ones that are particularly poor because they’re worth the effort.” I wish we felt this way more about our poems – that they are worth it. The photo makes me think of Out of the Dust by Hesse, and The Four Winds by Kristin Hannah. Thanks so much for sharing today.

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  5. Denise Krebs Avatar
    Denise Krebs

    Barb, wow. I am impressed with this beautiful imagery and story you have created about this iconic photo. Some lines that haunt me: “she breathes scorched desert” and “her exhaustion writhes” Wow. This is not the first powerful ekphrastic poem of yours I’ve read. Were you teaching the class or a student? If a student, next time, you’ll teach it.

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